Every Sentence is a Sandwich

Every Sentence is a Sandwich

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Hi, I'm Jim Dawes and I teach English at Macalester College, and look at this crazy sandwich. How am I going to eat this crazy sandwich? Look at that, it's crazy. Every sentence you write for a college essay is a sandwich and most sandwiches have too much bread. There's meat in here but I'll never taste it, come look. Here's the sandwich: "This evidence serves to show that Faulkner thinks Caddy is innocent." Can we get rid of some of this bread so I can eat that? Classic example: "serves to show." Do we need "serves to show"? How about-boom-"shows." There you go, one piece of bread gone. Closer to being eatable. Then think, what's your real subject? What's your real verb? Is it "evidence shows"? No. Boom, "Faulkner thinks Caddy is innocent." That is a sanwich. I can eat this sanwich. I can eat that. Good luck and write well.